Comments on: HELLIONS, AND GOD’S TWO GOOD FAVORS by Dameion Becknell

By: Alley

Alley — Sat, 03 Jan 2009 03:47:20 +0000

hey i like your stories and hoping that you do well in the future with them. love ya ttyl and chat with ya later!

By: AtomicWarBaby

AtomicWarBaby — Mon, 04 Aug 2008 16:37:11 +0000

Any kind of “god” that could commit such a genocide, I sure wouldn’t want anything to do with with, thanks but “no thanks”! Plus, there’s no way the incompetent fools running our Fed. gov’t. now could get their act together at all, much less find a cure so quick. FEMA can’t even handle hurricane relief efforts. The woman’s unborn baby being infected, that was pretty creepy, a zombie “Rosemary’s baby”, cool idea.

By: SMEAR

SMEAR — Sat, 26 Jul 2008 00:38:07 +0000

At the end of the story,the authorities call a medi-vac chopper in and order the all the casualties cleared from the back stairwell to make way for the blood transfusion gear, and to wisk the baby away on board the choppr…would they really have all that manpower to spare when the carnage would be on such a grand scale?Wouldnt it be spread so thin that it would almost be non-existant by all the recovered and badly injured ‘hellion’ children alone?Not to mention the hordes of other mutilated survivors as well.

Other than that…the story was great!

By: Mercurial Georgia

Mercurial Georgia — Sun, 20 Jan 2008 17:09:43 +0000

…and um, by flavour I meant favor. Oops.

It just that, god seem kinda cheap, instead of giving the two unitarians (both thought of the entire good) their two good favors each, god divided it up!

By: Mercurial Georgia

Mercurial Georgia — Sun, 20 Jan 2008 17:08:30 +0000

Although;

Wouldn’t it be more fitting to the theme of mercy if Janice was never critically injured in the first place, so that god’s second flavour was that Crystal survives?

Crystal was the one Jacob told the bit about the two flavours to, Jacob died believing it, seeing his wife and their unborn child to safety. It just doesn’t seem fitting if Crystal died before their child is born, and before the antidote gas came, she’ll have no way of knowing if the flavour came through.

Pippin is a good man, he really wanted the baby to be alright, that’s his first flavour, his second really should have been Crystal’s survival, because he doesn’t know Janice well.

…couldn’t Janice have gotten her hand mangled instead of being in the neck?

By: Mercurial Georgia

Mercurial Georgia — Sun, 20 Jan 2008 01:15:33 +0000

Oh wow, this is like the opposite of Ross Campbell’s “The Abandoned”, where it was the adults over 20 who first dropped dead when the storm came (or on the day of their birthday), and then their bodies woke up as a flesh eating zombie that can only be killed through destruction of the brain.

This is less scary, but much more heartrending. The people who are in charge, the adults, weren’t zombified, but goodness, it’ll be hard to put children down, especially since they are still there inside.

By: rhino

rhino — Wed, 16 Jan 2008 18:22:06 +0000

Well written! A great spin on the how the great panic could be different!