Comments on: LOST POTENTIAL by Tamara Wilhite

By: Andre

Andre — Sat, 03 Jan 2009 05:58:53 +0000

I liked your style though it was a little slow to build but I could not buy the ending. If the disease was already in the open then I am sure that there would have been widespread knowledge of it in the medical community before the government started wholesale bombing of facilities where it might be. It was very sad and depressing. Good writing though.

By: Ed

Ed — Fri, 02 Jan 2009 19:43:03 +0000

I really liked your story and your writing. thanks for sharing it.

By: Gary

Gary — Sun, 07 Sep 2008 09:56:52 +0000

Excellent story. Strong narrative, great build-up, wonderful conclusion. I’m looking forward to more from you!

By: Shawn Panzegraf

Shawn Panzegraf — Mon, 21 Apr 2008 11:33:06 +0000

Well done,
I thought it was an excellent, highly detailed work and a stunning example of fine first-person perspective fiction. Like a previous poster said, I worried about the examiner the entire time she was in the building.

As far as constructive criticism goes: My suspension of disbelief was tampered with some that by a gigantic coincidence after “melting miles and miles away” The Examiner “just happened” to abandon her vehicle in a highly infested area. I felt it kind of ruined the atmosphere of the disease going unnoticed in the system of institutionalization endemic in America. After all, if enough of the homeless had been turned to heavily surround a healthy person to the point of no escape the world would be in the grips of a Dawn of the Dead scenario already….

Other than that I would love to see more of this author’s work, as overall it was an excellent story.

By: Dan DeWitt

Dan DeWitt — Wed, 09 Apr 2008 17:08:40 +0000

Suicide by fire. Ouch.

Anyway, this was a unique but still realistic take on zombiism. Excellent read, Tamara.

By: tamara wilhite

tamara wilhite — Sun, 06 Apr 2008 03:08:30 +0000

I wrote the outline for this story while in the doctor’s office with my sick pre-schooler, after reading up on “autism spectrum disorder”. Having had kids misdiagnosed with stuff - and a serious misdiagnosis that put my own life in danger several years ago - a thought occurred: what else could explain a sudden explosion of autism?

As to co-writing, I do that for short stories and articles frequently. (Type Tamara Wilhite into Amazon.com, and you’ll see half a dozen Amazon.com Shorts and Kindles cowritten with friends.)

By: Arna

Arna — Fri, 04 Apr 2008 19:44:51 +0000

Excellent. Made me wonder about if doctors would be able to accept what they have in front of their faces too. Scientists tend to have a real hard time accepting whatever doesn’t lay within their point of view on “reality”.
Keep up the great job.

By: Mark Hatchett

Mark Hatchett — Fri, 04 Apr 2008 16:11:43 +0000

I couldn’t stop reading… This was great. I read Dan DeWitt’s story before reading yours. I would never have thought that linking autism to… Zombiism. It makes a good bit of sense, though. That is, if zombies make sense at all. I worried about the examiner the whole time.

You and Mr. DeWitt are pretty talented. Maybe you two could create a joint project? Hmm? Sound interesting? Maybe?

…Please?

By: Alex Moisi

Alex Moisi — Tue, 01 Apr 2008 19:13:30 +0000

Hah, good one. Sounds belivable too, I am certain many doctors would try anything to avoid diagnosing someone as a zombie. After all we do tend to go to great lengths to avoid the unpleasant. Sure maybe some would recognize it but would push it to the back of their mind and ignore the signs.

By: liz

liz — Tue, 01 Apr 2008 05:13:52 +0000

Oh they’d recognize a zombie alright. Either they wouldn’t believe it or next thing you know the suits would be there ready to take it a way to *diagnose it’s possible weapons potential*. then we’d all be screwed.